September Blog Assignment part I

An article in a recent issue of The Manchester Cricket explains the plan of 17 Manchester-Essex students to travel plan to Ecuador in the summer of 2011. I was drawn to this article because the topic is familiar to me. When I noticed MERHS in the headline, I was immediately curious. A photo above the article includes classmates and peers that I quickly recognize. The fact that the article is about my school and includes people I may know automatically steals my attention. Because this topic is somewhat familiar to me, it might cause me to put more focus into reading the article or even cause me to become involved with the task and group being discussed. The article thoroughly covers the topic while remaining relatively short. It covers all aspects of the Ecuador trip and leaves few to no questions unanswered. However, every paragraph and most sentences run long, causing the article to drag. The writing could be more concise, and a few sentences are written awkwardly. The article ends on a strong note providing a name, email address, and phone number to contact with any further interest or questions.